Проверьте на ошибки, пожалуйста ) My name is Erick, I macked a Paris opera house, by pretending to be a phantom. The managers of the Opera denominats me the Phantom of the Opera. One girl said that i was very ugly! I had appeared to them in the shape of a gentleman in dress-clothes . But i speak to nobody and fall away as soon as i am seen. I stalk about the building make no noise. [Soon] all the girls pretended to me [soon]. My life here is very very cool in opera house.

Не macked а made. Это Past, Simple. У тебя в тексте разные времена. Подумай над этим